bathtub murder- a poem

I've been here for three full days,
in this bathtub my body stays.
no one knows I'm still there-
that's because I had no one to care.

See my ice blue lips.
better yet, my cold dead hips.
he wont find me, he wont cry-
here in this bathroom, I did try.

For to my throat he held his knife,
I begged and pleaded for my life.
soon the bathtub began to fill-
till I became silent and still...

here in this bathroom, I still Lay.
body bleeding for 3 long days.
for his heart my soul I sold-
and now the water's grown really cold.

i'd like to know what you think ^-^

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i really like the rhymes and i think its cool that you described this person as if the soul was still waiting in the body for someone to find them.

cool poem! u've could have made it more sad and agressive though.. but other than tht it was cool

its very good! kao says he likes it too :D

Very nice,indeed its my style.

I actually like it a lot.

oh thank you ^-^

Now that's my type of poem. *stands & applauds*

it kind of gives me a sense of enduring pain, or event you wish to break.

But yeah, its a pretty awesome poem, im thinking about getting into this sort of thing myself.

very good! never let go of that wonderful ability to write.