Nightmare

Ok first dark poem I have tried so be truthful guys. The only reason I'm posting in Divine forums is that I dont want anyone I dont know reading it. So I have faith in you all to tell me truth. Please be honest.

From the start there was no end
His eyes fixed to her fragile body
The hunger runs through his veins
A glance from her blue eyes shows her pain

The pain to be held from this stranger
From the dark he approaches with silents steps
She begins to weaken with every breath she releases
As he moves closer the air turns to a chill against her naked skin
Nowhere to hide, she holds out her hand for that touch she craves

Feeling the strength of this mans hand against her frail existance
The beat of her heart quickens
She begins to tremble
He pulls her close as she begins to fall
His breath against her face makes her cry in silence

Gently he takes his hand and caresses her face
Looking deep into her eyes he sees her worries
Cradles her close to stop her tremoring body
Softly he kisses her pail skin
Her body has been overpowered by his mind

The nightmare has begun, she has no control
No control over her actions
Every muscle tightens
Breaking from his embrace
She turns to meet his darkened face

He pulls her into the shadows of the room
With no fight left she follows
Into the deep secret she has seen coming
She gasps for a breath as the air turns humid

He tilts her head as their lips connect
The bind of darkness made with one kiss
Innocence is no longer her soul
She will share the grave with the stranger she calls love.

dark, but beautiful

this is very good. its very deep and it really paints a picture. i liked it. it was very eerie though lol. overall well done.

Just one more thing, I have to re-name this poem:

The Love Of A Father.

I think you all get the jist of the poem now. Its not about myself, just someone I have met and felt for her when she evntually opened her heart to me.